| Medical Writing | | I'm not writing a whole medical story, but I have a little part in my story that has a doctor working on someone, and it's really messing me up. I'm not sure I wrote it right, and I can't go on without making sure it's right! I can't think of how to move forward. So if anything knows anything about the medical field, could you please read this small section of my story and help me fix it so it is correct. Thanks so much!*This story has not been reedited yet, so there might be a lot more things to fix. So if you need to you can ignore any other mistakes I make=P Really just worried about the medical stuff right now!* Thanks again!...The doctor was tending to her forehead, taping a piece of gauze to a small gash at her hairline. Kindland stood over her, watching both men work.“Done,” the deputy said, and stood up holding the handcuffs. Melissa’s arms hung loosely at her side. “Good,” Kindland said. He knelt down beside Melissa and helped her raise her arms to the chairs arm rests. “Done up here,” the doctor said, disposing of the dirtied cloth. “I’m going to need to take care of her hands now Detective, if you could move aside.”Kindland stood up and moved behind... | |
| | what would you have done | | okay i was at the vets office to day to pick up my dog and they were so crowded. there was a man there who was worried about his pet king snake. well he seemed fine and then he went in the back with his snake. when he came out i asked him if the snake was a boy or a girl because he didn't know and was going to ask the vet. well he didn't answer so i assumed he got bad news about the health of the snake. then he leaned on one of the machines in the office. he then passed out and smacked his head on the door. there was at least 15 people in there and i was the only one who got up to help this man. i helped him stand up and finally someone came over to help me get him into a chair. the office staff didn't even come to check on him until after someone went and told them what happened. they didn't even call 911. i asked a lady with a cell phone to call because the man was in and out of consciousness. i did freak out once though because his snake was coming out of the bag and i started yelling at him saying dude get your snake. i wasn't touching that. i kept talking to the man asking him if he had any health conditions. he wasn't answering so then i asked him if he was hypoglycemic and... | |
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